small Sister Mary
small Sister small Sister Mary-Magdalene of God sleep golden in the corner of wide eyes descends where many sandalled soles have trod the morning garden scents a sweet surprise sweeps down a regimen...
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Hi Maz,You really captured a mood here -- brings to mind the lyrics sung in that memorable scene from Cool Hand Luke .."I don't care if it rains or freezesall I need's my plastic Jesus,ridin' on the...
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Maz,I like a lot of the lines and phrases here, but was hopelessly lost in the syntax, mainly due to the lack of punctuation, but also in some of the word selection. Some examples of my...
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Thanks for your comments. I posted this with non-punctuation as an experiment, -it seemed to match the mood I wanted, but obviously it makes the poem incomprehensible,By the way, I don't know if it is...
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Maz, I twigged that this was a nun and followed her all the way down the "stony stairs", immediately cottoned to the "sleep" (it's a common expression in Oz too), but the couplet had me thinking I was...
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<<I would edit the poem at once, but for some reason, I don't have the 'Edit' option which should appear on my posts,just the 'Reply' one.>>Go to the main page for the board and there...
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